Haiku: your pet peeve and other musings about Buddhism

Just sharing some reflective verses from my meditation. I hope they are not in a wrong format.
20200411 Easter Dhamma Reflections - by DM (1) - cr

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Dana, this post (#23) explains what a haiku is. If it doesn’t make sense feel free to ask questions and I’m sure one of our regulars will be able to answer them. :smiley:

(Click on the upward arrow at top right to see the rest of the explanation.)

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Haiku! Hard to write
unrhyming terse art of verse
Happy accident

If deep meaning hides
syllables five, seven, five
That is a haiku

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@Dana, this one is for you:

Sometimes I wonder
if English haikus should go
five, seven, and five.

Five, seven, and five
comes from the Japanese tongue –
how the language sounds.

This poem here linked
is like a haiku longer:
five, eight, five, seven, seven – oops! Too long!

Listen to the sounds
of the rhythm of the words –
how he says them here:

da da da da DA
da da da da da da da DA
da da da da DA
da da da da da da DA
da da da da da da DA

The stress at the end
doesn’t sound much like English
when used for haikus.

Tl;dr – Japanese poems that use these systems of morae patterns have a different “sound” to them when haikus are read out.

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Found heptameter,
iambic pentameter,
Classically there!

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4 posts were split to a new topic: A Thread for Sonnets

Thank you Gillian,
I thought that just keeping it simple, expressing my observation or inspiration concisely without losing its essence, was suitable enough.

Now my first attempt for a formal Haiku. (5-7-5) It was inspired by a photo that I used for reflection this Easter. So I call it Easter Haiku:

Humility - R

Humble and worthy
in harmony with Nature
walked the Earth in Peace.

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Streams divert when blocked
Off-topic posts divert threads
D & D trolling.

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Writing honestly
with care and good intention
can not stop discords.

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List’ning openly
with love is an antidote
to sharing discord.

:pray: :slightly_smiling_face:

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On tall mountain peak
Above swirling forming mass
Whole world a haiku

Ancient temple bell
fills the silence with Echoes
Then they are gone gone

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Primordial bo
Shimmering crimson waving
Eaves, golden floor

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Forest pool is clear
Patience! little kingfisher
Your moment will come

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Haiku exercise
Does this really accord with
Dhamma-Vinaya?

How’s this better than
the good ol’ fashioned prose form?
Content, not structure,

is what’s important.
Why make communication
oh so onerous?


on·er·ous
/ˈōnərəs,ˈänərəs/
adjective
(of a task, duty, or responsibility) involving an amount of effort and difficulty that is oppressively burdensome.
“he found his duties increasingly onerous”
Similar: burdensome, heavy, inconvenient, troublesome, awkward, crushing, back-breaking, oppressive, weighty, arduous, strenuous, uphill, difficult, hard, severe, formidable, laborious, Herculean, exhausting, tiring, taxing, demanding, punishing, grueling, exacting, wearing, stiff, stressful, wearisome, fatiguing, toilsome, exigent
Opposite: easy, effortless
late Middle English: from Old French onereus , from Latin onerosus , from onus , oner-burden’.

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Crafting words is fun,
not onerous. It sharpens
one’s understanding.

:smiley:

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lol

Understanding of
Dhamma-Vinaya or of
poetic haikus?

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Dhamma-Vinaya
is my hope. Skill in haikus
is too hard to get.

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When haiku gods make
Haiku rain they come streaming
down in matching shapes

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If you are patient
with poetry possibly
meditation too!
:wink:

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Focus on word form
thoughts of complaining abate
Haiku transforms hate
:smiley:

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