Just sharing some reflective verses from my meditation. I hope they are not in a wrong format.
Dana, this post (#23) explains what a haiku is. If it doesn’t make sense feel free to ask questions and I’m sure one of our regulars will be able to answer them.
(Click on the upward arrow at top right to see the rest of the explanation.)
Haiku! Hard to write
unrhyming terse art of verse
Happy accident
If deep meaning hides
syllables five, seven, five
That is a haiku
@Dana, this one is for you:
Sometimes I wonder
if English haikus should go
five, seven, and five.
Five, seven, and five
comes from the Japanese tongue –
how the language sounds.
This poem here linked
is like a haiku longer:
five, eight, five, seven, seven – oops! Too long!
Listen to the sounds
of the rhythm of the words –
how he says them here:
da da da da DA
da da da da da da da DA
da da da da DA
da da da da da da DA
da da da da da da DA
The stress at the end
doesn’t sound much like English
when used for haikus.
Tl;dr – Japanese poems that use these systems of morae patterns have a different “sound” to them when haikus are read out.
Found heptameter,
iambic pentameter,
Classically there!
Thank you Gillian,
I thought that just keeping it simple, expressing my observation or inspiration concisely without losing its essence, was suitable enough.
Now my first attempt for a formal Haiku. (5-7-5) It was inspired by a photo that I used for reflection this Easter. So I call it Easter Haiku:
Humble and worthy
in harmony with Nature
walked the Earth in Peace.
Streams divert when blocked
Off-topic posts divert threads
D & D trolling.
Writing honestly
with care and good intention
can not stop discords.
List’ning openly
with love is an antidote
to sharing discord.
On tall mountain peak
Above swirling forming mass
Whole world a haiku
Ancient temple bell
fills the silence with Echoes
Then they are gone gone
Forest pool is clear
Patience! little kingfisher
Your moment will come
Haiku exercise
Does this really accord with
Dhamma-Vinaya?
How’s this better than
the good ol’ fashioned prose form?
Content, not structure,
is what’s important.
Why make communication
oh so onerous?
on·er·ous
/ˈōnərəs,ˈänərəs/
adjective
(of a task, duty, or responsibility) involving an amount of effort and difficulty that is oppressively burdensome.
“he found his duties increasingly onerous”
Similar: burdensome, heavy, inconvenient, troublesome, awkward, crushing, back-breaking, oppressive, weighty, arduous, strenuous, uphill, difficult, hard, severe, formidable, laborious, Herculean, exhausting, tiring, taxing, demanding, punishing, grueling, exacting, wearing, stiff, stressful, wearisome, fatiguing, toilsome, exigent
Opposite: easy, effortless
late Middle English: from Old French onereus , from Latin onerosus , from onus , oner- ‘burden’.
Crafting words is fun,
not onerous. It sharpens
one’s understanding.
lol
Understanding of
Dhamma-Vinaya or of
poetic haikus?
Dhamma-Vinaya
is my hope. Skill in haikus
is too hard to get.
When haiku gods make
Haiku rain they come streaming
down in matching shapes
If you are patient
with poetry possibly
meditation too!
Focus on word form
thoughts of complaining abate
Haiku transforms hate